The Half moon shall glow
The three shall come
The kingdom in chaos,
The worlds, in peril.
Peace will come,
When the kind reach their end.
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Kiri was just a normal, fourteen year old girl. She was five feet and two inches tall and most of that was in her legs. She had brown-blonde hair and gold-green eyes. Her face had a look of determination that was accented by two loose strands of almost white hair. The rest of her hair was kept back in a tight ponytail.
Her skin was tanned to a dull gold. She wore baggy t-shirts, jeans, and sneakers constantly. On her right ring finger was a gold ring with two clear crystals and one black crystal. Around her neck hung a golden model of the head of one of her favorite cartoon characters, a gift from one of her friends.
She got As and Bs and the occasional C in school, even though everyone thought she could do better. She had a riding lesson every Tuesday and participated in the occasional show her stables put on at holidays. She had several loose friends, but only a few close friends. She could be described as klutzy and slightly on the crazy side, and even though she had her problems, as every high school student does, she was often seen laughing.
Her five closest friends were Shara, Merry, Michi, Jane, and Momo. She had a couple of classes with Momo, one with Michi, and one or two with Merry. Shara and Michi she also met at lunch. Jane wasnt in any of her classes, since she was a year below everybody else and still in the middle school.
It was mid-October, only a day or so away from Halloween, and so far the weather had been warm and sunny. Kiri sat on her bed next to Momo, who had dark brown, shoulder-length hair that was parted slightly off to one side. Her eyes were also dark brown. She was wearing a light purple shirt and jeans, and a necklace with a guitar hung around her neck. On the floor in front of them was Jane, who had golden blonde hair. Her hair was long and almost pin straight. She had hazel, nearly blue eyes, and was wearing a white t-shirt and jeans. The three friends were hanging out for the day at Kiris house. Their plan was to then spend the night at Momos house and spend the next day at Janes house. Right now they were deciding what to do next.
We could just sit here and do nothing for a while, Jane proposed sarcastically.
Lets go out into the woods, suggested Kiri.
Oooh, yeah, Jane and Momo agreed eagerly. The three friends stood up and went downstairs to put on their shoes. They walked out the back door and into the woods happily. They were about two feet in when Momo noticed something shining under some leaves.
Thats strange, she said quietly to herself.
What is? Jane asked as she and Kiri looked to where Momos eyes were focused.
Look at that, its
.glowing
replied Momo, pointing. Kiri walked over and picked it up. It was a silver half moon pendant on a silver chain, and indeed it was glowing softly.
What is it? Jane inquired, a hint of wonder in her voice.
Its a silver half moon pendant on a silver chain, Kiri replied unhelpfully.
Well duh, joked Momo in a sarcastic voice.
Hey, Kiri said, sounding hurt. Suddenly the necklaces glowing intensified until it encompassed the entire area and the three friends were plunged into a white nothingness.
Um, okay
Jane whispered slowly.
That was a mildly interesting turn of events, added Kiri.
Guys, where are we? Momo asked nervously.
In a giant blob of white nothingness, of course, replied Kiri.
Oh, of course. Are you always this optimistic? Jane asked.
Its a gift
and a curse, answered Kiri jokingly.
And youre not worried because
why? asked Momo.
Adrenaline. Works wonders on making a person hyper, Kiri explained. Suddenly the light started fading slowly, and they were thrust into pitch darkness, made even more intense by the fact that their eyes could not adjust.
Okay, now this is a little scary, came Kiris voice out of the darkness.
Oh sure, a blob of white light you can handle, but a second of darkness and its goodbye Miss Brave! Janes voice said sarcastically.
Dont make fun of me, Im just claustrophobic, thats all, Kiris voice whined. No one had the chance to reply, however, as all at once the darkness receded and Kiri, Jane, and Momo found themselves standing in a large clearing surrounded by a forest.














Comments
This needs a lot more work. You need to work with the dialogue a good amount more. Mostly having more ways to say said. I see you use a lot of replied and asked, which you should look for more interesting ways to say that.
I personally don't like the style very much, but I guess if that's a way you like it, then it's okay.
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>>Michelle<<
I love you, Taylor =]
"You were given the life you live, because someone knew you were strong enough to live it."
[link] <<check it out peas^_^
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"Et Earello Endorenna utulien. Sinome maruvan ar Hildinyar tenn' Ambar-metta.
Out of the Great Sea to Middle-earth I am come. In this place will I abide, and my heirs, unto the ending of the world."
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>>Michelle<<
I love you, Taylor =]
"You were given the life you live, because someone knew you were strong enough to live it."
[link] <<check it out peas^_^
My book is sitting in a slump. I haven't had much time to work on it. But oh well.
Yah, a little more work, and I think it will be great!
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"I'm not weird, I'm Gifted!"
"Brilliant!"
"Fantastic!"
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"Et Earello Endorenna utulien. Sinome maruvan ar Hildinyar tenn' Ambar-metta.
Out of the Great Sea to Middle-earth I am come. In this place will I abide, and my heirs, unto the ending of the world."
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"Et Earello Endorenna utulien. Sinome maruvan ar Hildinyar tenn' Ambar-metta.
Out of the Great Sea to Middle-earth I am come. In this place will I abide, and my heirs, unto the ending of the world."
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>>Michelle<<
I love you, Taylor =]
"You were given the life you live, because someone knew you were strong enough to live it."
[link] <<check it out peas^_^
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"Et Earello Endorenna utulien. Sinome maruvan ar Hildinyar tenn' Ambar-metta.
Out of the Great Sea to Middle-earth I am come. In this place will I abide, and my heirs, unto the ending of the world."
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